Chapter 8

HOOOOORAY Dawn of the Lizard Warrior Chapter 8 is now posted and complete! Thank you for your patience.

Enjoy

3 Comments »

  1. Vivachihuahua said,

    June 30, 2009 @ 9:21 am

    I have reviewed the 8th chapter and it was good. but plz describe if they are in a church
    cuz u mentioned praying. if they are at church plz describe the surroundings. other than that 8.9/10

  2. Poogue Master said,

    June 30, 2009 @ 11:17 am

    That was a simple, yet effective, chapter that features another important element of the plot. Like chihuahua said, I would have liked to get a feel for the setting. Are they in a dark chamber deep underground, or just in a general church? Answering these questions in your writing may help give clues to astute readers.

    Additionally, I would have liked to see some thought and emotion on Alex’s part. This chapter he seemed totally out of the action; he felt like a bystander that received the action, but didn’t even think about anything. I guess I can kind of see you trying to give personality to Zeelon more this chapter, but Alex was invisible. While writing your story try to give characters personality, whether it be being enraged often ( :roll: ) , or whatever.

    Still, I liked this episode. Continue writing! :grin:

  3. Poogue Jim said,

    July 22, 2009 @ 6:50 pm

    Vivachihuahua, Since you were wondering about the church, it is mentioned in Chapter 7.

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