Thermopylae Discussion
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DaPoogueBomb said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:13 pm
IM the first comment!
DaPoogueBomb said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:13 pm
anyone here??????????????
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:14 pm
hi
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:14 pm
I think that in the story you have to set the tone of the story a little more smoothly. Like Poogue Jim’s story, it’s helpful if you give us some details of what the setting is before we get to any action, as it helps most readers visualize.
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:15 pm
its the prologue ins in media res and ill add a : 1 month earlier
DaPoogueBomb said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:16 pm
wat?
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:17 pm
in media res is latin for in the middle of things
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:17 pm
Okay, but as of now the setting’s ambiguous. Release the next episode soon before readers become increasingly frustrated and confused!
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:18 pm
I’ll work on it no guarantees but I’ll try to get it in on Friday
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:20 pm
Okay. I advise you to break up each line of dialogue like what I have done in The Tale of Michael. The line breaks really help readers’ eyes.
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:21 pm
no prob
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:27 pm
Yeah, it’s just pressing enter whenever there’s dialogue or a new paragraph, and adding a little dash before the new paragraph. Indenting doesn’t work online in HTML, so we have to make do with the dashes.
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:31 pm
no prob whats ur opinion on the story
DaPoogueBomb said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:37 pm
sorry i was gone! i made another riddle (i linked it to the others) but i read vivas comment and i love it! 8/10
p.s i gave it an 8 cause of the swearing
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:38 pm
alright all good at least the reason wasn’t as worthless as mine for Poogue Jim’s
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:40 pm
whats Poogue Master’s opinion
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:40 pm
Like I said before, I’m partly lost in the story. So, I read, and immediately there’s action, but the action never ends in this case. This is why we need to slow the tempo of the story down, and to do that, you have to add a quieter, calmer scene, like a talking scene or something. It is only in those calmer scenes where we get to understand the characters, their personality, and the setting around them. As of now, those scenes are absent. Of course, I know it’s only a prologue; just I’m waiting for more to get me out of confusion.
In summary, currently it’s 100% action, and no description scenes yet. I know there will be soon, though!
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:41 pm
there will this in media res remember?
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:42 pm
I know, and I quote, “Of course, I know it’s only a prologue; just I’m waiting for more to get me out of confusion.”
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:43 pm
what did u think of Astinos’ death
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:47 pm
Just by looking at the story, I can barely tell who Astinos is. Please break up all the dialogue, or put who said each line, because as I’ve already said, I’m confused by the story. Sorry.
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:47 pm
okay
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:49 pm
Anyways, I’ve gotta go. Bye!
DaPoogueBomb said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:51 pm
viva?
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:53 pm
sup
Vivachihuahua said,
June 23, 2009 @ 3:54 pm
read a small preview of the next episode
David said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:26 pm
hello?
David said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:29 pm
There is too much movement in this block of text.
The dialogue should be spaced with a new line, and the Quotation marks should be put in to use, not free-flowing words.
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:36 pm
Hello!
Yeah, I told him about the line breaks and dash things. Is there a way to indent on the blog; if so, I haven’t found it.
David said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:38 pm
hello
David said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:39 pm
I don’t seem to know any way to indent…
David said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:39 pm
Also, multiple spaces shorten into two.
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:40 pm
Hmm…
David said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:40 pm
you told me to read the the post with vivachihuahua and dapooguebomb?
David said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:41 pm
I need to go eat some watermelon…
be back in about five min.
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:41 pm
So, if you’re putting a lot of spaces between lines of text (for example, pressing enter three times), it still shows up as if you only pressed it twice?
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:41 pm
Yeah, you should read the comments in the post “Story Announcements.”
David said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:47 pm
ok, story annoucements
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:48 pm
Good luck; it’s pretty long!
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:50 pm
I’m sorry but I have to go to dinner.
Leave your comments about what you read somewhere, and I’ll reply to it. Sorry!
David said,
June 23, 2009 @ 8:54 pm
its so funny!
Poogue Master said,
June 23, 2009 @ 9:31 pm
In what way?
Please explain.
Vivachihuahua said,
June 24, 2009 @ 8:56 am
hey
Vivachihuahua said,
June 24, 2009 @ 9:03 am
to david i yes some times Dienikes is telling the story sometimes he is talking to people
DaPoogueBomb said,
June 24, 2009 @ 10:18 am
is anyone on??????????
Vivachihuahua said,
June 24, 2009 @ 10:27 am
im on
Poogue Jim said,
June 26, 2009 @ 3:21 pm
Boo