Story
The page Master of the Elements is being completely rewritten. It has been dormant for a very long while, and I will continue to add more to the story.
X-Man’s write-rate system:
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DaPoogueBomb said,
July 8, 2009 @ 8:14 pm
the story kinda confused me esspecely the part where hes like this could be it! b-!
i didnt know wat the heck was going on most of the time. i did kinda like how u jumped into the action.
im really sorry but i didnt get it like at all i dont want to be mean
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but it deserves a 4/10 or
DaPoogueBomb said,
July 8, 2009 @ 8:15 pm
sorry i got that
wrong : ? :
DaPoogueBomb said,
July 8, 2009 @ 8:16 pm
wat the heck iz wrong with this????!!!!
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DaPoogueBomb said,
July 8, 2009 @ 8:16 pm
DaPoogueBomb said,
July 8, 2009 @ 8:16 pm
there we go, again very sorry
Poogue Master said,
July 9, 2009 @ 12:41 pm
I like your unique writing style, David. It mimics the quality of top-notch authors in our real world; the way you used the prologue to give qualities to Aepa. Now, correct me if I wrong, as I’ll try to explain to DaPoogueBomb what is going on based on my comprehension. (I’m probably wrong anyways.
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In the prologue, Aepa has a blessed spirit, being able to communicate with the winds. It is revealed that Aepa will have the power to control the air, one of four major elements in the Poogue world. The spirit that Aepa talks to is a mentor of sorts, a voice that will guide Aepa’s reasoning throughout the story; we’ll probably learn more about this mysterious conscience later on, possibly its name, and its background/history.
When we move to Chapter 1, we can immediately notice the powers that Aepa has been given as a child: extreme speed and swiftness. Aepa’s personality seems rushed, similar to the wind; he is always in a hurry because ideas run through his mind quickly, and he easily forgets what to do. This is proved because Aepa “always” forgets to set his alarm clock and, as a result, is always late to school, suggesting some sort of forgetfulness trait.
The statement that is similar to “This could be it! This could b-!” is when Aepa is trying to avoid being late to school, as he usually is. This time, however, he still misses the bus, and will probably be berated as he arrives tardy to the classroom. My prediction is that we will see Aepa being an outsider in the class; he has already differentiated himself with the other classmates, and those other students probably regard Aepa as a fool. This will set up Aepa as an underdog force, whose story we will follow as the plot continues.
Hey, so even if you didn’t straightforwardly say what was going on, and how Aepa is like, it was fun trying to decipher him with the clues you gave. This is the type of story that gets our brains moving; if we want to understand the plot, you’re going to have to do some extra thinking (directed at DaPoogueBomb, no offense though)! I hope I wasn’t supposed to put my predictions, but they were my true thoughts while reading! I’ll try to post David’s and DaPoogueBomb’s ratings up, I’ll have to ponder them.
But anyways, keep up the great work, David! Hopefully we might have a story once every week? Oh, and I’m pretty sure I’ll be rewriting The Tale of Michael (maybe with a title change), so get ready for it!
DaPoogueBomb said,
July 9, 2009 @ 8:35 pm
Huh? im not sure i got all that. i guess now i get it a little more… its sorta sad how he dies or watever happened in the 1st chapter. the SPLAT! part grossed me out
if u want a better rating plz make less gory.
his brains “SPLAT-ed” was a little gory now that i sorta get it and reread it that just grossed me out SPLAT! just freaks me out!!!
me as the reader does not want to get sick reading a story.
now that i get it im super sorry but i have to give it a
DaPoogueBomb said,
July 9, 2009 @ 8:36 pm
Oh yeah by the way very exited 4 Tale of Michael
Poogue Master said,
July 9, 2009 @ 8:49 pm
Hey, DaPoogueBomb, are you there?
David said,
July 9, 2009 @ 9:47 pm
As the story goes on, you will find out why he has to die so early.
Poogue Master said,
July 9, 2009 @ 9:48 pm
All right.
I can’t wait!
Poogue Master said,
July 9, 2009 @ 9:50 pm
Oh, and, I’m probably going to release the newest rendition of The Tale of Michael sometime over the weekend. Do you have any ideas for a solid title, though? Considering the main character will no longer be called Michael…
David said,
July 10, 2009 @ 7:03 pm
Will the plot of the story be the same? Still looking for the big Mace?
Poogue Master said,
July 10, 2009 @ 7:50 pm
Yeah, looking for that mace still.
But that’s just part of the plot. There’s more storylines and plots that extend beyond that point; it’ll probably be 40 episodes or more? Hmm…I need to find a nice place to stop the story.
Poogue Master said,
July 11, 2009 @ 12:24 pm
David, when will your new computer be arriving again?