Comments on: Chapter 8 http://blog.xiesland.net/?p=296 Where the Xie family and friends come together Wed, 13 May 2026 22:55:23 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=1.5.2 Comment on Chapter 8 by: Poogue Jim http://blog.xiesland.net/?p=296#comment-3976 Thu, 23 Jul 2009 01:50:22 +0000 http://blog.xiesland.net/?p=296#comment-3976 Vivachihuahua, Since you were wondering about the church, it is mentioned in Chapter 7. Vivachihuahua, Since you were wondering about the church, it is mentioned in Chapter 7.

]]> Comment on Chapter 8 by: Poogue Master http://blog.xiesland.net/?p=296#comment-3848 Tue, 30 Jun 2009 18:17:11 +0000 http://blog.xiesland.net/?p=296#comment-3848 That was a simple, yet effective, chapter that features another important element of the plot. Like chihuahua said, I would have liked to get a feel for the setting. Are they in a dark chamber deep underground, or just in a general church? Answering these questions in your writing may help give clues to astute readers. Additionally, I would have liked to see some thought and emotion on Alex's part. This chapter he seemed totally out of the action; he felt like a bystander that received the action, but didn't even think about anything. I guess I can kind of see you trying to give personality to Zeelon more this chapter, but Alex was invisible. While writing your story try to give characters personality, whether it be being enraged often ( :roll: ) , or whatever. Still, I liked this episode. Continue writing! :grin: That was a simple, yet effective, chapter that features another important element of the plot. Like chihuahua said, I would have liked to get a feel for the setting. Are they in a dark chamber deep underground, or just in a general church? Answering these questions in your writing may help give clues to astute readers.

Additionally, I would have liked to see some thought and emotion on Alex’s part. This chapter he seemed totally out of the action; he felt like a bystander that received the action, but didn’t even think about anything. I guess I can kind of see you trying to give personality to Zeelon more this chapter, but Alex was invisible. While writing your story try to give characters personality, whether it be being enraged often ( :roll: ) , or whatever.

Still, I liked this episode. Continue writing! :grin:

]]> Comment on Chapter 8 by: Vivachihuahua http://blog.xiesland.net/?p=296#comment-3847 Tue, 30 Jun 2009 16:21:11 +0000 http://blog.xiesland.net/?p=296#comment-3847 I have reviewed the 8th chapter and it was good. but plz describe if they are in a church cuz u mentioned praying. if they are at church plz describe the surroundings. other than that 8.9/10 I have reviewed the 8th chapter and it was good. but plz describe if they are in a church
cuz u mentioned praying. if they are at church plz describe the surroundings. other than that 8.9/10

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